Hello, comrades. This is a summary of our first homework rain in June. Thank you all comrades for your support and cooperation. The first person to submit the assignment this time is Ma Lirong, the second is Lei Xiao, and the third is Yan Jiangkun. Your writing efficiency is worth learning from, and we all encourage you.

Assignment area:

1. Ma Lirong - The five beauties and their original families in "Ode to Joy 1"

Introduction: Introduction to the popular TV series Ode to Joy.

2. Lei Xiao - search now or memorize it by heart

Introduction: Artificial intelligence is so powerful, why do we still need to learn it?

3. Yan Jiangkun - "Poor Charlie's Book" - Munger's Universal Wisdom

Introduction: Let's take a look at what universal wisdom is.

4. Su Xiangru - "After seeing so many successful experiences, let’s take a look at a failure - Summary of the May Month Value of Class 5"

Introduction: Gao Yan from our class A summary of high-value and high-value students.

5. Qin Ling - How to influence your parents by taking the blame?

Introduction: How to make parents accept our kindness.

6. Shang Chaoqing--Written to her daughter on the Children’s Day

Introduction: How to influence children to study well through personal actions.

7. Hu Meimei - Enjoying it

Introduction: An interesting little boy.

8. Ni Shuqing - The first step to face yourself sincerely and face up to your professional problems

Introduction: Summary of career planning work.

9. Cayrol Ye - "Practice Cayrol Ye 007 324" Insurance Plan of Money Bag Series

Introduction: Have you bought insurance for your family?

10. Zhou Yankuan - My College Entrance Examination Essay

Introduction: How would you rate this essay?

11. Wu Muling - Being respected is worse than being liked by others

Introduction: How to be respected.

12. Du Hangyu - I have received the first advertisement

Introduction: The author is a bit naughty.

13. Liu Xiaoqin - How I read the original English book

Introduction: A rookie’s path to learning English.

14. Chen Juanhua - Don’t let your friends gossip about you behind your back

Introduction: How to get along happily with classmates.

Comment area:

1. Lei Xiao - 2 articles

①Commentary article: "Reflection on why I can't write 600 words" - Wankang

Material, material, material. A clever woman cannot make a meal without rice. The writing skills are not as good as a few excellent materials. Usually accumulate more. It is recommended to refer to the "Inspiration" article in "Treat Time as a Friend".

②Commentary article: "Find Your Learning Cycle" - Mou Tao

I have also been lazy in my recent column studies. I haven’t left a message for a long time. After reading your article, I am motivated again. grateful! Although your article is not long, it should still have subtitles to help readers grasp the structure.

2. Shang Chaoqing - 2 articles

①Comments on the article: "Finding your learning cycle" - Mou Tao

Comments: Finished reading the article The first impression is that the writing is smooth and the logic is clear.

The cyclical phenomena that occur during the writing process are also described in detail and in place.

"I believe that as long as I persist in writing, one day it will surely bear fruit." It is better to replace this sentence with "I believe that as long as I persist in writing, I will write better and better." It is more natural, because Flowering and bearing fruit is a terminal thought, but what we want is growth, which is endless.

In the penultimate paragraph, you should increase your investment when you are at a low point. "Increase investment" do you want to express "slow down and seek stability"? This reference is unclear, whether it is the learning project that increases investment, or the increase in investment in the same learning project that requires more time.

Overall, the writing is good, keep up the good work.

②Commentary article: "It is better to be respected than to be liked" - Wu Muling

Comment:? "If anyone must like us..." This paragraph And the content of the next paragraph is logically contradictory to the content of the previous paragraph.

The previous paragraph said that liking comes from personality reasons, and respect comes from temperament reasons.

? And this paragraph also says that liking is because the other person feels a certain kind of peaceful warmth, and calls this warmth a sense of security. This sense of security comes from protective signals, and It takes great strength of character to say this kind of signal. I have read this passage many times. It is too difficult to understand, and I cannot see how it has anything to do with the character.

? Your following methodology, the second, fourth, eighth, tenth, twelfth, fourteenth, fifteenth and seventeenth are talking about Are you talking about principles or methods?

Go down and study it carefully about what "methodology" is.

? The first few paragraphs of your article are okay, but the rest of it is unreadable because the logic is too confusing.

There are too many things I want to express later, and I didn’t gain anything from reading it. And I don’t understand what the temperament you are talking about is. The temperament studied by the professor, the temperament of the passage you quoted online, and the temperament you want to talk about later may not be the same thing. If you really want to write an article in this area, first give the "temperament" in your article a name. Define it!

[Good quote]

The temperament produced by our words and deeds is determined by our past experiences. Your current temperament hides the path you have traveled, the books you have read and the people you have loved.

Although the comment is a bit spicy, I hope it is my true feeling after reading your article. I hope you will carefully polish your articles in the future.

3. Su Xiangru—2 articles

①Commentary article: "Notes on a Concise Survival Guide to the Blockchain World" - Cao Zongjin

About blockchain investment and Learning, we belong to the consent stage. Based on Teacher Xiaolai’s article this week, before entering, we must first understand the concept of cycles, and then face blockchain investment with the mentality of being determined to win, and then calm down and think about it. Learn blockchain knowledge bit by bit and uncover the riddles, so I think the first thing we should do is to truly master the technical principles and applications behind blockchain to determine whether the projects behind blockchain assets are Worth investing, this should be what Teacher Xiaolai wants to tell us, I am the direction he wants us to go in!

I hope this time we can keep up with the times and use our own judgment!

② Review article: "Going Home" - Yu Xiaoqi

An unfinished memory of home arouses the desire to read more, hoping to See the other half of the story.

4. Yan Jiangkun - 2 articles

① Comment article: "Zhixing 002 | How to make the future come now?" 》——Zuo Fei

Predict the future development trend, then design your own goals according to the development trend, and implement them step by step.

②Commentary article: "Reflections on a brief reading of "Animal Farm" 》——He Kang

Everything the animals in Animal Farm do is for their own benefit.

5. Chen Juanhua—2 articles

①Commentary article : A good protagonist must have these 5 qualities | Story Analysis - Huaishan

Golden sentence: The audience absolutely does not want the protagonist they pay attention to to fail to achieve the goal no matter how hard they try. How hopeless this is! – although this is the reality of most of life. David Thoreau said that all living beings live a life of silent despair. Most people may not be able to realize their wishes throughout their lives, and they will die with regrets. But most viewers are not allowed to believe in their own ordinaryness, so we are willing to listen to stories. What we want is hope.

Comments: I was really touched after reading your article. From Ultraman’s life-and-death battle with monsters, Pleasant Goat was stuck in a hot pot and still found a way to escape. Then in the Battle of Chibi, Cao Cao was defeated and almost died, and lost an army of 100,000, but he was able to learn from the pain and divided the world. There is also the protagonist in "Remaining Crime" who goes deep into the drug lords and deals with life and death with the underworld boss. These protagonists will all have the qualities you mentioned. The appeal of a story may be more than that. I hope your story will be more bright.

②Commentary article: Facing the wall and thinking about one's faults - Zhao Huaying

Comments: Looking at the conflict between the father and the child from the perspective of the mother, the disorder of factors leads to the father's scolding and letting the child play He felt aggrieved and took extreme actions that made his father angry. The mother did not take sides, pointed out that both parties had made mistakes, and tried to reconcile them. As a father, you don’t always criticize your children for their mistakes, and as a child, you don’t have a rebellious mentality. Appropriate tolerance and mutual concessions may make things more enjoyable.

6. Du Hangyu - 2 articles

①Commentary article: "The gains brought to me by multi-dimensional competition" - Gao Ziqi

A "learner", the most Perhaps what you want to see is that you are subtly changed by the knowledge you learn.

You can reasonably integrate the concept of multidimensional competition into your life and work. This may be the ultimate goal of our learning - to solve various problems we encounter through learning!

Great to do this!

However, when the article describes the part of what it "got", the meaning is not expressed clearly because of the unclear sentences. There are some sentences that scratch my head and I can’t understand them in context, such as this sentence in the fourth natural paragraph: “If I can be excellent in product operation, I can work as a full-time product manager in Shanghai. ". Ask for guidance.

PPSS.. "By the way, how did Iron Wolf lead the good guys astray?"

② Commentary article: Seven years, a lifetime - Xiao Yan

First of all, I'm sorry, I can't give you any substantive advice for your troubles

Should we be thankful that at the end of this life, the next life is not yet here? Before arriving, you have the opportunity to realize that your "body and mind need conditioning". You can put the problems that bother you on the table and allow them to be "exposed" to the outside world. Perhaps you are already solving the problem to a certain extent.

Furthermore, Teacher Xiaolai gave us the concept that seven years is a lifetime, and we also agreed with this concept. So, seven years, can we also regard it as one of the seven-year cycles in our lives? The answer is, yes. So...what should I do if there is a problem with the cycle? ——Read Xiaolai’s special topic this week.

I hope you can find the ABZ where your heart is. come on.

Finally, running is a great way to exercise. Recommended to you

I wish you good health first and smooth work next!

7. Ni Shuqing - 2 articles

①Commentary article: Life Essay - Weng Xin

Comments:

The article is divided into Although the two parts are essays, it can be seen that they are not written completely casually. They are all written in the structure of event + reflection + sublimation.

Story No. 1:

Incident: Lost the basketball game; I thought I couldn’t compare to others, so I eliminated myself mentally from the beginning.

Reflection: The reason is because (1) insufficient training (2) affected by the fear of failure (3) In fact, the strength of the teams is almost the same.

Sublimation: The same is true at work. When you think others are great, you also belittle yourself and find a reason to give up.

The second story:

Events: (1) Go home to visit grandpa and stay with grandpa at home for three days. (2) At the wedding of a good friend, I was infected by the atmosphere.

Reflection: Pain, helplessness, happiness and excitement are contradicting us at the same time. How should we face the aging of the elderly? How should we seize the happiness in front of us? Grandpa’s story tells us to “go home often”; our brother’s wedding reminds us to learn to “create happiness”.

Sublimation: Life is very trivial, but we should not fall into triviality; when we are complaining and irritable, in the face of life and pressure, we often think about what the hard work is for?

Golden words:

1. Don’t be frightened by what you see or hear. Many of what you see and hear are not true. Many things can only be determined by yourself. You won’t know until you take action and try it.

2. Whether you are happy or sad, the day will pass. Why not make yourself happy?

Small suggestions: Part 2 tells two stories. The reflections on the two stories are actually very different, or a comparison. The two stories are often interspersed in the article. If they are separated, the structure may be clearer.

Finally, thank you very much for your comments on my article.

②Commentary article: "Writing Confusion" - Long Qipeng

Comment: I have also had such confusion. It is indeed difficult to write a complete article this way. There are so many articles that are half-written and abandoned.

I think writing is more of a way of expression, that is, having an idea first and then expressing it. In order for me to have ideas, I need more time alone, and I need to seriously perceive life. . This might be easier. However, sometimes I don’t do well, and I am still training deliberately.

Finally, you also said that "I am used to being in a circle designed by others." This may have something to do with the education we received since childhood. In fact, I found that you have found a way to break through yourself, which is to "ask questions", and the process of asking questions also takes time to train. I personally feel that “it’s a good way to question yourself every day.”

According to psychology, when you realize your problem, half of the problem has actually been solved. I hope you will be happier the more you write!

Thank you for sharing, and thank you for writing what many of us feel. Haha

8. cayrolye - 2 articles

①Commentary article: Do you value your credit - Dai Guoqing

This article introduces "credit" = concept of assets; quote Teacher Wang’s words to grasp the theme; use specific new consumption model cases to explain the theme clearly; the concept of credit can be further extended: credit to business reputation to personal trustworthy character can lead to the idea of ??"business assets = business individuals" in the future society with pictures and texts Clarity - looking forward to the next masterpiece

②Commentary article: Get up early, you need to win the battle with the self - Shi Jun

This article uses the habit of getting up early to elicit the "self" "Self" concept; describing two specific concepts through one's own experience; a strong desire to summarize experiences + enough persuasion to convince the self to achieve habit cultivation; the psychological part of the text is too cumbersome (there are too many mental activities and I am exhausted after thinking about it. How could this happen? There is only one reason to get up early and there are many reasons not to get up; getting up early is actually the cultivation of habits - there are many things that can be discussed in this aspect; you have to let the readers know how to implement a habit after reading it instead of going around again. Go into the concept

Looking forward to the next masterpiece

9. Qin Ling - 2 articles

① Comment article: Do you value your credit - Dai National Day

Before I saw your article, I really didn’t value my credit so much.

Think about it, if when we buy things now, we are like drug dealers who need to point guns at each other when making transactions. We have so many transactions every day. It’s a bit scary to think about how many scenes there are that require holding a gun. This shows how important credit is!

Personally, it feels like a copywritten for Alipay, which is very good. The layout looks quite comfortable.

Golden sentence:

Assets = owner’s equity (visible) + credit (available liabilities)

② Commentary article: On the public account A review of - Hu Jiandong

Because I have high expectations for myself, I don’t want to let down my readers, and I can’t go around excerpting other people’s articles just to increase my followers. Your persistence will definitely pay off!

“But do good deeds and don’t ask about your future!” Since I learned about this sentence, I have put it in my WeChat signature. Let’s work hard together!

Golden sentence: Each of us should give ourselves some alone time, so that our lives are not dependent on anyone and we can control our own desires. People who can control their desires will have a better quality of life than People who are full of desires are much happier and can better maintain psychological balance.

10. Zhou Yankuan - 2 articles

①Comment article: Are you still playing King of Glory? —Liu Xing

Comments: The article describes an interesting thing in life and tells a story. I have never played Honor of Kings, nor do I play various video games. Learn some interesting things about the game through the article, which is very fresh. In particular, I am convinced that everyone has a rich story.

The writing of the article is colloquial and the layout is very rough. It may be that the comrades completed it in a hurry and will not have time to polish it carefully in the future. In fact, I also finished it in a hurry. I hope we can improve together.

②Comment article: How to have a modern value love? ——Meng Shunzhen

Comments: The topic of the article is more attractive and useful to some people. The content of this article is compiled from Teacher Liu Xuan’s psychology class video courseware, which is similar to reading notes. You can indeed learn a lot of psychological knowledge from the article.

The article lists 4 common problems, and I agree with the last three. Regarding the first one, the article advocates that you should not look at the other person's mobile phone when you are in a relationship. This is controversial, with an issue of Qi Pa Shuo debating the topic. I don't think what a psychologist is saying is right.

The layout of the article is more careful and the length is quite long. In fact, each point can be written separately. In terms of language, I personally suggest that it be more concise, and there will be too much miscellaneous things. It should be concise and concise. Maybe I'm wrong, maybe emotional articles are like this.

Finally, I wish you a happy and fulfilling love. [Rose]

11. Wu Muling - No comments, but red envelopes have been sent.

12. Hu Meimei - No comments, no red envelopes.

13. Ma Lirong - too many!

14. Liu Xiaoqin - 15 articles

①Commentary article: "Ode to Joy 1" Five Beauties and their original family - Ma Lirong

The article describes Regarding the family backgrounds and character traits of the five heroines, their families of origin still have a great influence on their characters.

The writing is smooth and the layout is very comfortable. I think it’s great!

②Commentary article: "Search now or memorize it by heart" - Lei Xiao

The author points out the origin of this article at the beginning, which naturally leads to the issues to be discussed. Then describe the two viewpoints respectively, and finally put forward your own ideas. The thinking is very clear. I will also share my views here. Now that artificial intelligence is so powerful, why do we still need to learn? I think learning can make my brain more flexible, which is what the author said increases the density of gray matter and increases the chance of mastery.

③Commentary article: "Poor Charlie's Book" - Munger's universal wisdom - Yan Jiangkun

This is a reading note that talks about five important concepts. I would like to make a small suggestion. It would be very good if I explain a few concepts less, explain each one thoroughly, and give some easy-to-understand examples so that a liberal arts student like me who has never read this book can understand it. . Are the requirements too high? Ha ha. Reading notes are for yourself. If you want to learn through teaching, research how to teach these concepts to readers, and I guess you can write a few more articles.

④Commentary article: After reading so many successful experiences, let’s take a look at one that failed - Summary of the May Month Value of Class 5

Xiangru still has too high demands on himself. . Those who are capable work hard, and your service to the class will be appreciated by everyone. Nothing is perfect, no need to be demanding.

Explore while doing things, sum up a set of methods that suit you, and achieve a good balance between work and life. Learning by doing, there will always be times when things are not as expected. I am happy to see you grow in the process!

⑤Commentary article: "How to use the blame-taking method to influence your parents?" 》——Qin Ling

Golden sentence: We have to coax, hide and be patient with our parents.

If we don’t coax, others will naturally do so. And the person who was very coaxing was the salesperson selling health care products.

Comments:

From the article, we can see the author's filial piety towards his parents and his willingness to spend time to study it, which is very rare.

Indeed, if your children don’t work hard on the elderly, the health care product sellers will work on it for you.

I hope we can accept the filial piety from our children calmly in the future, manage our finances well, eliminate worries, and be an old lady who keeps up with the times.

⑥Commentary article: "Written to my daughter on June 1st" - Shang Chaoqing

Golden sentence: I think that what I can help my children is the most valuable. What I have to do is to be myself, a person who loves knowledge and seeks truth, and a person who insists on lifelong learning. I think there is no better way to influence children's views on "learning" than by practicing it.

Comments: The author's writing has the style of a smiling teacher. After reading a few sentences, I felt very familiar, haha. The author has a very good mentality. He first reviews his parents' education and affirms that they tried their best. Then think about how to be a good parent and how to educate your daughter. Finally, I came to the conclusion, be yourself, be a person who insists on learning, and set an example for your children. I think it's very well written.

⑦Commentary article: "Enjoy It" - Hu Meimei

The author is a music teacher and describes a little boy he taught who was forced to learn piano. I like to come to class and get to know the teacher and start the heart-to-heart conversation. It can be seen that the author is a patient teacher who understands children. The writing is smooth and eloquent. The kids are so lucky to have you.

⑧Commentary article: "Face yourself sincerely - the first step is to face your professional problems" - Ni Shuqing

The author summarized the problems encountered in his work, through The written form helps clarify ideas and is very meaningful for future improvement work. I would like to make a small suggestion. If you can classify these issues and give some examples, it may be clearer to readers.

⑨Commentary article: "Practice Cayrol Ye 007 324" Insurance Plan of the Money Bag Series - CayrolYe

The author studied the method of buying insurance for his family because of their illness. I haven't done any research on this, but my husband's company buys medical insurance for employees' family members, which saves a lot of worry. Students in need can read this article.

⑩Commentary article: "My College Entrance Examination Composition" - Zhou Yankuan

First, I checked the number of words in the composition. Well, more than nine hundred is enough. Then I thought, if I had been so proactive in the college entrance examination back then, how good of a school would I have gotten into? So now I give you full marks and be vain. Ha ha. Commentary article: "It is better to be respected than to be liked" - Wu Muling

When the author was studying the elite daily class, he thought of a related article by another author and elaborated based on his own understanding. Review article: "I have received my first advertisement" - Du Hangyu

The author recommended an app for watching high-definition videos. Those who are interested can take a look. Review article: "Don't let your friends gossip about you behind your back" - Chen Juanhua

The author is still a college student. He has the vigor of a young man and also the childishness of a young man. Youth is your capital, you have time to make mistakes and time to correct them. Review article: "Wait with enough patience for the flowers to bloom - Reply to a psoriasis patient" - Yan Hongyu

Golden sentence: There is no night that cannot be endured, and there is no dawn that cannot be waited for. [There are too many golden sentences, let’s just give this example]

Impressions:

It’s so well written!

Thank you for this experience, which has allowed you to become a doctor after a long period of illness and form your own unique health regimen. This is the most precious wealth. I studied Chinese medicine, but in the end I did not engage in medical work. I only had some superficial understanding of it and had never applied it myself. Traditional Chinese medicine is a kind of empirical medicine, and you are already your own doctor.

In addition, the layout of this article is particularly beautiful and well organized. I really want to learn how to typesetting from you!

?Comment article: "I want to talk to you" - Yu Hui

Golden sentence: Be good in your world, I hope I can forget it in my world You have been here before. [I really don’t want to choose! ]

Thoughts:

I really don’t want to comment anymore, I just want to cry with you. Every sentence is true, and every word is full of nostalgia. How could two such good people end up like this? All praise pales in comparison to words that reveal true feelings.

I hope you can get over the pain as soon as possible, because you still have to support your children!