1. Change "bright" to "dense";

2. "Important" and "need" are repeated, you can remove "important";

3 , improper matching of predicate and object, should be to overcome shortcomings and correct mistakes;

4. The gender of Xiaohong and Xiaoming is unclear, it can be changed to this: Xiaohong and Xiaoming met on the road, and she said to Xiaoming: "Will you go to the library tomorrow?"

5. "Registered a stationery trademark";

6. "Towels, soap" and "daily necessities" are repeated, you can change the and etc.;

7. Inherit the tradition and carry forward the spirit;

8. Strong body and full of energy;

9. "Two pairs" and "champion and runner-up" "The quantity does not match, so change "two pairs" to "two persons";

10. The cost should be said to be doubled